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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the reasons behind worldwide
land
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degradation
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,
while
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 the table shows the causes of
land
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degradation
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 in three regions (North
America
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,
Europe
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, and Oceania) during the 1990s.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 over-grazing and
deforestation
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 are the main causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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.
Europe
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 had the highest amount of degraded
land
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,
whereas
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 North
America
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 had the least. In terms of the causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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, over-grazing and
deforestation
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 are the major contributors, accounting for 35% and 30%, respectively. Meanwhile,
over-cultivation
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 makes up 28% of the total., but other activities comprise a mere 7%. With regards to
land
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degradation
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 in
Europe
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, the total was 23%, followed by Oceania and North
America
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 with 13% and 5%, respectively. In
Europe
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,
deforestation
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 was the main contributor at 9.8%, followed by
over-cultivation
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 and over-grazing.
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, in Oceania, over-grazing ranked first at 11.3%, followed by minimal
deforestation
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 and no
over-cultivation
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. In North
America
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,
over-cultivation
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 was the primary cause of
land
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degradation
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, followed by over-grazing and
deforestation
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, america, europe, deforestation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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