More and more people are moving from rural areas to live in the cities What problems can this cause? How can these problems be solved?
Today society has a
problem
with migration
Correct article usage
the migration
humans
from Change preposition
of humans
village
to cities. It is a big Fix the agreement mistake
villages
problem
for humanity, countries
and economy. People
selling his
houses and territories, and for Correct pronoun usage
their
this
they have Add a comma
this,
reason
– money. Add an article
a reason
However
, a lot of people
work
with this
situation. They are using modern technology, psychology, laws and new ideas from change hand work
.
Escape
from rural territories is Wrong verb form
Escaping
old
trend, but today it creates big problems. At Add an article
an old
first,
nobody works on
places. Prices for products are highest, quality is worse and Change preposition
in
assortment
is awfulAdd an article
the assortment
,
because a few companies working for a big population. And in cities salary Remove the comma
apply
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
fall
, finishing working places and many Wrong verb form
falling
people
don’t have work
place
and money Correct your spelling
workplace
for going
backChange preposition
to go
.
It is Change preposition
to.
Correct article usage
an economy
economy
and Replace the word
economic
psychology
trap, and Replace the word
psychological
people
made it for himself
. And for Correct pronoun usage
themselves
cherry
on Add an article
the cherry
a cherry
cake
– worst price to rent apartments.
Scientists and Add an article
the cake
politics
Replace the word
politicians
working
Wrong verb form
work
on
all world Change preposition
in
working
every day with Verb problem
apply
this
problem
, but they find exit rarely and effect
is minimal. Modern techniques are Correct article usage
the effect
biggest
and Correct article usage
the biggest
effective
Correct quantifier usage
most effective
from
ten years ago, plants Change preposition
than
is
Change the verb form
are
most
Correct article usage
the most
survival
and animals can take the most milk, meat and wool. But it is few. Nowadays, Replace the word
survive
countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
administration
is offered nice conditions for farmers. In big and small Fix the agreement mistake
administrations
countries
this
step had perfect
effectAdd an article
a perfect
the perfect
,
because inhabitants could make Remove the comma
apply
the
money without going out Correct article usage
apply
from
their houses. In Change preposition
of
medium
Correct word choice
modern
countries
problem
was saved, and politics Fix the agreement mistake
problems
making
new plans. I thinkWrong verb form
made
,
humans Remove the comma
apply
needs
only financial Change the verb form
need
guarantee
from Fix the agreement mistake
guarantees
administration
, hospitals and schools near their villages. And after three or five years many Correct article usage
the administration
people
will be work
without bosses Wrong verb form
working
on
fresh air.Change preposition
in
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