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The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table shows information about the three different countries with the highest populations. These countries include China,
India
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, and the United States of America.
Firstly
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, China has about 1.415 billion people with an increase of 0.39% citizens since the year 2017. The
country
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 has a density of 151,
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however
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 it has a land area of 9.388
million
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 square
kilometers
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kilometres
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 and an urban
population
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 of 58%.
Meanwhile
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India
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 has only about 1.354 billion
and
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an
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 1.11%
increament
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increase
 ever since 2017. There are over 455 people per square
kilometer
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kilometre
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 in
this
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country
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 with a land space of 2.973
million
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 yet
has
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32% of humans
in
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India
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.
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 in the United States of
America
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America,
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 there are only 327
million
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of
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people with a
population
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 rise
over
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 0.71%. In spite of
that
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this
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country
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 has large land covering about 9.147
million
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 square kilometers.
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, the USA has 83% of citizens. In
conclution
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conclusion
, the
country
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 with the most urban
population
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 is the USA yet it has only 327
million
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 humans.
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India
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 has the largest density and China won in
population
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, country, million, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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