The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
bricks
destined for the building industry are manufactured.
Overall
, the entire process consists of 7 steps, from collecting the clay to the delivering process.
Firstly
, a digger collects clay from the ground,
then
, thanks to a metal grid, bigger pieces are separated from the smaller ones, which are transported by a roller.
Next,
sand and water are added to form a paste which the
bricks
originate from. Those can be obtained two ways, either cut with a wire cutter or put the mixture in a mould of the desired shape. Afterwards, all the
bricks
are dried out in a drying oven for 24 up to 48 hours, before getting cooked in a kiln. There, they
initially
reach a moderate temperature in the range of 200-980 degrees Celsius,
then
a higher up to 1300 degrees Celsius. In the final step, all the
bricks
are cooled down for 48-72 hours.
Lastly
, when they are fully cooled, they are packed and ready to be distributed.
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