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The first line graph shows the average world oil price for each year from 1970 to 2005. The second chart shows the top six oil-exporting countries and how much they export each day.

The first line graph shows the average world oil price for each year from 1970 to 2005. The second chart shows the top six oil-exporting countries and how much they export each day.
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The line graph represents the average global petroleum market value for each year between 1970 and 2005.
Furthermore
, the bar chart illustrates the top
six
 fuel-exporting countries and the amount they export each
day
.
Overall
, the oil price reached a peak in 1981. After it hit the highest point, it plunged.
It is clear that
 the oil price fluctuated from 1987 to 2003 and recovered in 2004.
For
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 the top
six
 oil-exporting countries, Saudi Arabia was the largest exporter,
while
 Norway, Iran, the United Arab Emirates and Nigeria were the smallest exporter. In 1970, the diesel cost was at around 7 US
dollars
 per
barrel
. It took 5 years to climb to 45 US
dollars
 per
barrel
. After that, it dipped slightly for 3 years in
row
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then
 surged sharply to a peak in 1981 at 80 US
dollars
 per
barrel
. Unfortunately, it dropped dramatically to 25 US
dollars
 per
barrel
 in 1987 and fluctuated until 2003.
Nevertheless
, the price bounced back to 50 US
dollars
 per
barrel
 in 2005.
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 the
six
 largest
six
 oil-exporting countries in 2005, Saudi Arabia ranked number one in the petroleum industry. They exported 9
millions
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 barrels per
day
. The major competitor of Saudi Arabia was Russia, which exported around 6.6
millions
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 barrels per
day
.
On the other hand
, Norway, Iran, the United Arab Emirates and Nigeria exported in similar quantities, approximately 2
millions
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 barrels per
day
.
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