The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The above two pie charts

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data on

tourists

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primary reasons to

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the

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Orange

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in 2006 compared to 2016.

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, the most significant feature is the annual events

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the highest percentage in 2006.

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in 2016 the strongest score was related to restaurants. It is evident that the number of annual events

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dramatically decline from 45% in 2006 to 32% in 2016.

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restaurants

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percentages

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10% in 2006

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sharply

growth

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to 41% in 2016.

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, the theater and

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had 13% 5% in 2006.

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, in 2016 the theaters and other reasons exhibited a similar score within 8%.Related to museums the percentage was high in 2006

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27%

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started to decrease gradually to 11%.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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