The diagram above shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks.

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The picture describes

about

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the production of canned and bottled carbonated beverages in factories. There are five steps involved

cleaning

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the

water

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, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering

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filling and delivering to markets.

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with

filter

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filtering

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raw

water

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using

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modern machine by adding

water

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softener and chemicals

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. It aims to separate the bacteria from the

water

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, the clean

water

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was pumped into electric heaters. After that, it flows to the cooling pipe to get

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temperature

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carbon dioxide to make the

water

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carbonated.

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, all the content

such

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as colouring powder, syrup and flavour mix in

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boiler.

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filtering and filling the

water

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the

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bottles and cans

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box

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boxing

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in to

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cartons.

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, the ready box will

deliver

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be delivered

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to supermarkets by using trucks and people will get

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enjoyable beverages.

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1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

146 words

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Innovation is often driven by the pursuit of profit and economic growth. However, some argue that innovation should be targeted towards addressing social and environmental issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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