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The diagram above shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks

The diagram above shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonated drinks
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The chart illustrates the 5 various stages of generating containers and canned carbonated beverages.
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, it is evident that there are different sections and machines in producing bottles and beverages, beginning with the
water
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 cleaning
stage
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 and ending with packaging products. In the first
stage
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, raw
water
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 in the factory enters a filter for cleaning,
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 special equipment creates a
water
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 softener and removes any chemical materials. In the next
stage
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,
water
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 is pumped to evaporate in the electric heater and
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 cross through a cooling pipe to make carbon dioxide, the carbonated
water
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 remains and is sent to the next
stage
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. In the third
stage
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, several materials are combined
such
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 as coloring, syrup, and flavour with
water
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. After that, it should be filtered in
stage
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 4, and bottles and cans filled with carbonated
water
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. In the final
stage
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, these products must be packaged and delivered to the supermarket and consumers.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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