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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The
Iine
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Line
 graph illustrates the number of international tourists
visited
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who visited
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the
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different three places in a European country from 1887 to 2007. The unit is measured in
thousands
.
Overall
, it can we evident that
in
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a large majority of visitors visited
the
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apply
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Europe in 2002 and 2007, and
few
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a few
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thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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people
 in 1987. A glance at the graph
reveal
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 that more
then
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than
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 70
thousands
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thousand
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 of individuals visited the lakes in 2002, and the same number of
people
 visited the mountains in 2007. In the same year the decline was observed for the
visitor
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visitors
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visited
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who visited
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 lakes only 50
thousands
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thousand
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. In 1987, only 40
thousands
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thousand
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people
 visited the
coast
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coastal
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 areas and
then
sudden
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increased
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in
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trend
observed
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 from 1992 to 2007. For the
mountains
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mountain
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 areas, only 20 thousand
of
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people
 visited in 1987 and very few
increment
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increments
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was
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were
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 observed
a
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over a
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period of time. Around 35
thousands
 of tourists visited the mountains in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousands, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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