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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish

#process #fish
The provided picture gives information about how smoked
fish
 is made.
Overall
, there are 10 stages in
this
 diagram, the procedure can be divided into three main groups beginning with catching
fish
 to freeze, followed by preparing them to smoke, and
lastly
 smoking and storing them to sell.
The first
step
 is that fishermen
cathes
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catch
fish
 from the sea and carry them to the port by boat. After that
putting
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put
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 the
fish
 into a freezer, before thawing them in fresh water.
The next
step
 is that thawed
fish
 are cut using a knife, after which they are waited in salt water to make them yellow in colour. Following that the
fish
 are smoked through the use of a barbecue,
following
this
, the smoked
fish
 are packed and for
this
step
, square-shaped boxes are used.
After
this
, the packed smoked
fish
 are frozen at the temperature of 0 degrees and they are stored in a cold store. Over the course of the next
step
, the
fish
 are loaded in a truck to distribute to
fish
 shops and ultimately, they are ready to sell.
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grammar
Be careful of small grammatical and spelling errors such as "fishermen cathes" instead of "fishermen catch".
cohesion
Try to make the sequence of stages clear without repeating words unnecessarily, and ensure each step logically follows from the previous one.
vocabulary
Use a varied range of vocabulary and sentence structures for better clarity and refinement.
introduction conclusion
Your essay has a clear introduction that effectively outlines the stages of the process, and a conclusion that wraps up the description neatly.
coherence
The process description is comprehensive and follows a logical sequence from start to finish, which is key to explaining a diagrammatic process.

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