The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the
graph
shows the average of countries importing from Austria in the period between 1990 to 2012 . the
graph
shows the percentages fluctuated in some countries like
USA
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the USA
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while
others had a sharp
increasing
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increase
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or
declining
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decline
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like
China
and
USA
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the USA
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respectively. From 1990 to 2000 the
graph
illustrated the highest exporting from Australia to Japan at 26% ,
while
China
and India came with the lowest percentage at 3% ,
furthermore
was
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in the middle at 11%,
Although
the percentage remained the same at 3% in India till 2000, the other ¬-percentages increased in us to 11% and
China
at 5%, main
while
declining in Japan. From 2000 to 2012, the
graph
gave a gradual increase in
China
at 27%
while
a range of stability
21
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at 21
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% in Japan On
one
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the one
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hand in India the percentage gradually increased from 2000 to 2010 till reached
at
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apply
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6% followed by a sharp decline in 2012,
mainwhile
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meanwhile
in the USA gradually decreased from 2000 to 2010
at
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to
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only 5% followed by
sharp
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a sharp
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increase at 6% in 2012
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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