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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum duringthe year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show theresult of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visitduring the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum duringthe year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show theresult of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visitduring the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table compares the
quantity
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 of tourists to
Ashdown
Museum
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the1
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the 1
 year after refurbishment and the result of surveys about
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the satisfactions
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satisfactions
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satisfaction
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 of visitors
at
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in
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 the same two periods.
Overall
, it can be seen that after refurbishment the changes
of
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Ashdown
Museum
 had
a
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apply
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positive
trends
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trend
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, particularly the number
tourists
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of tourists
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, who
very
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were very
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 satisfied
the
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with the
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Ashdown
Museum
,
it
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apply
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shows that it increased by one and a half times,
while
 the
quantity
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number
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 of visitors who
dissatisfied
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were dissatisfied
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falled
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fell
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. 1 year before the amount of
s
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visitors
of
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to
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Ashdown
Museum
 who
very
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were very
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 satisfied
15
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was 15
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%, satisfied 30 % from
total
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the total
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of
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apply
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survey results. In
contract
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contrast
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, who
dissatisfied
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was dissatisfied
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 was almost 40% and very dissatisfied 10%. In
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the survey
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survey
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survey,
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 5 % of respondents
stayed
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had
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 no responses. After 1
years
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year
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, the level
off
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of
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satisfactions
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satisfaction
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 increase,
the
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and the
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 results of respondents
initial
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 rise.
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