The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.
The given pie charts show
the
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information about total global consumption and
electricity
generation for
last
year, indicated as percentages.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that
oil
was consumed the most across the globe,
whereas
that
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of
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coal accounted for the largest in generating
electricity
.
However
, it is interesting to note that though
oil
mainly
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in several countries, yet, its application in generating
electricity
was not that promising.
To begin
with, a closer look at
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chart presents that fossil fuels like
oil
and coal
along with
gas
were
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accounted for about
four fifth
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of the total
energy
consumption,
while
the remaining 20% were broken down into various alternative
energy
resources. At 34.3%,
oil
had the greatest percentages among all other types of
energy
consumptions
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, followed by coal and Gas with approximately 10% and 5% lower, at 25.1% and 20.9%, respectively.
While
energy
from combustible renewables and wastes accounted for 10.6% which was about threefold of hydro
energy
at 2.2%, Nuclear
energy
was 6.5%. With regards to
electricity
generation, coal, on
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hand, accounted for
largest
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ratio in creating
electricity
with nearly 40%.
Next,
gas was the second at roughly 20%, followed by
Hydro
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hydroenergy
energy
and Nuclear
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at 16.1% and 15.7%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, oil, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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