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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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this
 line
charts
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chart
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 depicts
number
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the number
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about
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of
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 multiple countries from 1978 to 2007 it is clear from the graph that
had
Verb problem
there was
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increase
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an increase
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 and
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a
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decrease
of
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in
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 them.
According to
 what is shown, the
coast
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cost
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had been
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was
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 40 per cent in 1987 it
is undergo
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is undergoing
is undergone
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 to
leveled
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levelled
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 off
then
 had
decrease
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decreased
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 after that swiftly,
that is
 the
coast
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cost
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 one of
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the reason
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reason
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reasons
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to
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for to
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increase
it
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apply
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is
desertificaiton
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desertification
 and heat
Moreover
,
lake
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the lake
a lake
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 of rain
it
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apply
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is
reason
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the reason
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to make
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for making
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 that earth rough.
While
 the
lakes
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number of lakes
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 had
starts
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started
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from
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at
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the
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apply
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10 per cent in 1987 and had
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 in 1992 after that from 1997 to 2007 had
get
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got
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a wave
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wave
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waves
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 for a
lot
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lot of
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 reasons
Firstly
, the rains
not
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, not
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a
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apply
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constant it may change
at
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in
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winter
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the winter
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 season had
increase
 comparison
the
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to the
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 summer the rain had
decrease
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decreased
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 which why it is the
coast
 had wave
Secondly
, the la consist from the rains.
To sum up
, we could say that the
coast
 and the
lakesit
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lakes
lakes it
 may change many times depending on the conditions and weather.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, coast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
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