the bar graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by US teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the bar graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by US teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar graph demonstrates the number of fast food consumed by American adolescents in Belle High School from 1975 to 2000.
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, the graph covers a period of 25
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from 1975 to 2000. The consumption of fish and chips
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recovered from its dip in 1980
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over 80,
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it emerged in 1985 at about 95.
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, it
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plummeted over the rest of the period
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with just under 40 in 2000.
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, hamburgers utilisation soared through the initial
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, beginning at about 10,
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approximately 95 in 1990 where it begins to level off.
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, hamburgers number soared
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it to reach over 100 by the year 2000.
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analysing the paragraph, pizzas share similar behaviour as hamburgers. The number of pizzas consumed by US youngsters in 1975 was just about 10.
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, by the following
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it rose to approximately 10 numbers per annum,
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1995 when it began to stabilize.
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, the graph shows an opposite trend between fast food utilisation of three different meals. It can be seen that hamburger is the favourite fast food among high-schoolers and
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utilisation has gotten a sharp rise over the time span of 20
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