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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The topic of
animals
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 testing
medicines
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 for humans has been controversial. Some people believe that
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animals
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 testing is essential when it comes to
medicinces
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medicines
medicine
,
whereas
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 I agree with those who think that it is wrong to
use
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animals
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 in
laboratories
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. On one hand, it is commonly believed that
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animals
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animal
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 testing is essential when it comes to
medicinces
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medicines
medicine
. The most important reason is that many essential medical discoveries involve experimentation in
animals
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 in order to have
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medicines
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 for disease treatment.
In nowadays
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, there are many emerging infectious diseases.
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 means that we have to test and explore the new
medicines
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 to fight against the new diseases.
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 the latest research conducted by Bangkok University, Thailand, it was revealed that drugs used today to fight against Monkeypox were utilized
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in animals
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animals
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animal
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 testing in their production.
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animals
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 in
laboratories
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 plays a major role in discovering
medicines
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.
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, it seems to me that it is wrong to
use
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animals
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 in
laboratories
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. The most significant reason is the fact that it is unacceptable to
use
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animals
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to
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for
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 cruelty and trauma for our benefit. The lives of
animals
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 should be respected.
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 is because there are alternative methods of research and
it
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they
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 can provide effective
result
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results
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as well as
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annimals
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animals
animal
 experiments. To illustrate
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, in
the
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apply
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recent news, it has been reported that
animals
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 held in
laboratories
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 for the
propose
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purpose
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 of animal testing undergo considerable pain and suffer from the frequent routine procedures. The
animals
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 display common
chinical
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clinical
 signs of distress
such
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 as gasping, seizures and
palaris
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phalaris
palates
. I agree with
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 point because it is unethical to continue animal testing. An effort must be made to
use
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 alternative procedures of research in
medicines
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 and cease animal testing
immediatly
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immediately
. In conclusion, having considered both sides of
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 topic,
although
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 many important
medicines
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involve
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in
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animals
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animal
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 testing, I agree with those who think that it is not appropriate to
use
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animals
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 for discoveries. I strongly support that all efforts must go to using an alternative.
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Ensure that all grammatical and spelling errors are minimized throughout the essay to improve clarity. Consider using tools or having a peer review to check for mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a consistent and clear argument throughout the essay. Revisit the body paragraphs to ensure each point is distinctly presented and transitions smoothly into the next.
task achievement
Elaborate on your examples and explanations to provide a deeper insight into your arguments. This will strengthen your points and demonstrate critical thinking.
task achievement
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a well-rounded discussion based on the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
The main ideas are well-supported with examples and explanations, which make the arguments compelling.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed both views of the argument, making your opinion clear and justified.
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