The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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has considered
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shortening the working
week
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and extending the weekend.
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opinion, I strongly believe that
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is a worthwhile
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as it benefits not only workers but
also
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several economic fields.
Firstly
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, since workers are faced with tremendous
difficulites
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and deadlines from both professional and personal life, leading to stress and mental health problems, reducing the working period
in
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each
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will probably provide them with more
time
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to solve
such
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problems.
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, employees who have
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of
task
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to complete at
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work place
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will no longer feel helpless when they have to pick their children up at school as they now have more
time
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.
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, a shorter
work
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week
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will
also
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enhance productivity.
This
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is
due to
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the fact that when employees have fewer days to complete their tasks, they tend to highly focus on
such
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missions and
work
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with
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higher
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pace. Take,
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, a company in Japan
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a
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research and showed that
four-day
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work
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week
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led to
40
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% increase in productivity.
Besides
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this
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, countries deciding to shorten the
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week day
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and extend the weekend will
also
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reap financial rewards.
This
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is because longer weekends provide
worker
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more
time
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to relax,
pursure
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leisure
pursuit
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and interact with society, which will significantly reduce stress and maintain a healthy
work
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-life balance.
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,
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modification can act as a precursor to fostering
the
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economic growth, as with more leisure
time
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, those people will take part in more relaxing activities, thriving
some
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sectors
such
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as tourism and entertainment.
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, in Finland, the tourism industry has witnessed
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increase in revenue since the
gorvernment
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reduced the length of
working
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the working
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week
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
longer
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weekend would be highly advantageous as it
provide
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us
many
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potential benefits in both individual and public aspects.

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To improve your task response, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more depth and detail where possible. Add more examples and further explanations to fully develop your points. For instance, discuss how stress reduction specifically impacts productivity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Strive for more sophisticated cohesion between your points and paragraphs, using a wider range of linking phrases and conjunctions. This will help in demonstrating a higher command of how ideas are connected clearly and logically.
Task Achievement
Your essay presents a clear position on the topic with well-reasoned arguments that support your stance.
Task Achievement
You have included effective examples to substantiate your points, such as the company in Japan and the tourism industry in Finland, which helps to make your argument convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, coherent body paragraphs, and a strong conclusion that summarizes your opinion well.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your use of topic sentences and concluding sentences helps to guide the reader through your argument efficiently.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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