The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment statuses.

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The graph illustrates the entertainment

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enjoyed by males and females in five different types of employment status.

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, the amount of relaxation

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of people who do not work was higher than people who have jobs.

Men

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usually have more free

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than

women

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. Specifically, there are two parts in

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chart that do not mention

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employment, people who have full-

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jobs do not have excessive

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for entertainment, at 45

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for males and 35

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for females. About part-

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jobs,

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part just

have

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women

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information, females spend 40

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in free

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. Meanwhile, the spare

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of the unemployed is highest with

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at 85

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and

women

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at 78

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Men

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and

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who are retired have more

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for relaxation, at 82

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and 79

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respectively. Housewives have more

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off when they work at home, at 40

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and the

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's data was not mentioned in

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, hours with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment statuses.

In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetable. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

the type of media that people of differnt age groups used to get daily newsw in one country in 2011

Some people think that there's nothing we can learn from history previous characters,while on the other hand,some of them believe that there is a lot that we can learn from history,such as avoiding the mistakes that people before made. In this article, I will be discussing both views.

Some people think that manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.