The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment statuses.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and

women of different employment statuses.
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The graph illustrates the entertainment
time
enjoyed by males and females in five different types of employment status.
Overall
, the amount of relaxation
time
of people who do not work was higher than people who have jobs.
Men
usually have more free
time
than
women
. Specifically, there are two parts in
this
chart that do not mention
men
.
About
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Regarding
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employment, people who have full-
time
jobs do not have excessive
time
for entertainment, at 45
hours
for males and 35
hours
for females. About part-
time
jobs,
in
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apply
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this
part just
have
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has
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women
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women's
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information, females spend 40
hours
in free
time
. Meanwhile, the spare
time
of the unemployed is highest with
men
at 85
hours
and
women
at 78
hours
.
Men
and
women
who are retired have more
time
for relaxation, at 82
hours
and 79
hours
respectively. Housewives have more
time
off when they work at home, at 40
hours
and the
men
's data was not mentioned in
this
part.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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