Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenager should focus on subjects they are the best at or they are most interested in. To what extend do you agree?

Nowadays, people think that young people should focus
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subjects
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, some people believe that teenagers should
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disciplinine
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discipline
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their
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subjects
they can do well or they
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interest
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in. I personally believe that students should concentrate on
subjects
that
they
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they are
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interesting
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because
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if they
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something that they really
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, they could unleash
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potential of
subjects
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that they give into.
To begin
with, school is the place
that
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everyone who
are
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studying should get knowledge to be used in the future.
However
, the facts that many schools are
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brainwashing
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brain washing
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students
for
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worker
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that
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could be used in factories, they
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to use their own ideas or
passionate
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something that they
interested
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The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, indicating a preference for allowing students to focus on subjects they are interested in.
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The writer acknowledges the opposing viewpoint, which helps to demonstrate consideration of multiple perspectives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Well-rounded education
  • Diverse skill set
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Discover interests
  • Latent talents
  • Academic specialization
  • Mastery
  • Motivation and engagement
  • Academic performance
  • Career pathways
  • Competitive edge
  • Social interactions
  • Diverse viewpoints
  • Social skills
  • Critical thinking
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