The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The given pies below illustrate the mean parts in representative meals of three
kind
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of nutrients, all of which can be harmful if eaten
to
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too
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much. One striking feature is that
,
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the
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apply
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sodium and solid fat
is
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are
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superior in
dinner
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,
while
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the sugar which we add prevails in
snack
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snacks
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. Both saturated fat and sugar
utilize
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equally at
breakfast
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. Looking at the pie chart related to sodium, it forms 14% of the foodstuff of
breakfast
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and bite, which is the deepest compared to the other meals.
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While
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Dinner
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dinner
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leads the way in terms of sodium usage with 43% followed by lunch, which expends 29%. In terms of soaked obese, at
breakfast
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spends
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the lowest amount with 16%. At lunch and
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dinner
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dinner,
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solid fat
were
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chosen by comparatively higher part than snacks, 37% and 26% utilization,
accordingly
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.
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, the added sugar has different portions. In respect of usage, snacks come first with 42%,
then
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dinner
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foods at 23%. Lunch comes in third with 19% followed by
breakfast
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at a slightly lower number of 16%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, breakfast with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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