The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.
The table depicts the proportion of female workers, who participated in senior management in three companies within 40 years from 1975 to 2015.
Looking at
an
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the
overall
structure,it is readily apparent that,there were increase
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an increase
for
all percentages of participants over the given Change preposition
in
period
.Preliminary part of the period
,Finsbury Ltd
was observed as the highest indicator,which replaced
by Eldan Add a missing verb
was replaced
Ltd
in the ultimate period
.
Initially
,for Eldan Ltd
,the rate accounted for 3% in19 75,remained
steady in 1980.Correct word choice
and remained
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Afterwards
Afterward
the sum grew consistently until the end,the final count was 64% in 2015.In terms of Bamforth Add a comma
Afterward,
Ltd
,the share constituted 9% in 1975,then
increased steadily,the indication was equal to 46% in
the end of Change the preposition
at
period
.
Regarding Add an article
the period
to
Finsbury Remove the preposition
apply
Ltd
,it began the period
as
16%,declined gradually until 1985,Change preposition
at
thereafter
amounted to 15% in 1985.The share dropped slightly from 22% in 1980 to 20% in 2000,despite a rise to 26% in 2015.Correct word choice
and thereafter
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