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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares how many
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trips
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made
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 by children aged five to twelve years in a particular country to mobile to and from school using five different transportation modes (car passenger, walking, cycling, walking and
bus
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, and
bus
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). The units are measured in millions of
trips
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 per
year
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.
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, at the beginning of the
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, a significant majority of children reached school and went back home by walking.
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, the number of
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 made by car passenger kids witnessed a sharp growth,
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 for the other modes of transport fell in 2010. In 1990, a majority of
trips
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 from and to school were by walking, standing at approximately 12.5
million
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 per
year
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.
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then
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 significantly decreased by half from the beginning period to precisely 6
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 in a
year
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.
On the other hand
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, the
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 of children who became car passengers had a sharp increase from around 4
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 to almost 12
million
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 in a
year
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. Regarding the remaining
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 made by other modes of transport, the
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 by
bus
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 fell moderately by almost 2
million
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 in a
year
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.
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, both
trips
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 by cycling and walking and
bus
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 started at around 6
million
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 in 1990, before dropping significantly to 2
million
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 and about 3
million
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, bus, year, figure, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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