The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The above line graph demonstrates how
does
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apply
seniors
people in Europe spent their leisure time between 1980 to 2010.
The most significant feature is the highest score was related to watching TV from 1980 to 2000 .Change the noun form
senior
While
surfing the internet received the lowest percentage from 1980 to 2000. However
, in 2010 hiking had the strongest number and theatre was the weakest activity.
Its
noticeable that the rate of watching TV Replace the word
It's
It is
show
gradually Fix the agreement mistake
shows
increase
from 60% in 1980 to 70% in 2000 Wrong verb form
increased
then
strat
to decline in 2010 to 60%.Correct your spelling
start
Moreover
, the number of hiking dramatically growth
from 20% to the peak point in 2010 Replace the word
grew
within
80%.Change preposition
of
In addition
, theature exhibited a decline percentage to 30% in 1990 then
started to raised
gradually to 60% in 2010.Verb problem
rise
Furthermore
, reading
score Add an article
the reading
was
fluctuated and Unnecessary verb
apply
recieved
the lowest score in 2000 at 20%.Correct your spelling
received
In contrast
, the number of people surfing the internet
sharply increased from 5% in 1990 to 2000. Capitalize word
Internet
However
, reading and internet exhibited a similar increase pattern to reach their beak point in 2010 within 60% and 50%.Submitted by rahafalkhashti7 on
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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