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2.The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

2.The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
The chart represents
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in six various forms of profession in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 in 2007.
Overall
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,in teaching
female
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females
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 are
dominent
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dominant
 than
male
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males
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while
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 in construction
female
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females
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 are negligible than
male
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males
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.
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However
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 in advertising,Journalism,scientists and
law
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law,
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 both genders have almost
compareable
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comparable
 percentages.
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 ,
Journalis
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journalism
 is only the
prefession
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profession
 among all listed where men and women are equal in
numbers
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 .
However
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 ,in teaching ,
advertising
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and advertising
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 ,therapists women are more than men with percentages
52
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%,90% and 81%.Teaching and
therapistrs
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therapists
 are the
profession
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professions
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 where
female
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females
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 have
remarkbly
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remarkably
 high in
numbers
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 than
male
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males
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.In
teaching
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teaching,
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female
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females
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 are 90%
while
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male
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males
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 are only 10% .On
contrary
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the contrary
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, In construction,scientists and law
male
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males
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 are larger in number with
numbers
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 90%,60% and 54 % respectively .In construction gap in the
numbers
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 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 is
highest
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the highest
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 which is 80%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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