The graph below shows how elderly people in Europe spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph illustrates the types of leisure activities that the senior citizen in Europe did in their free time

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1980 to 2010.

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, a significant growth can be seen in hiking

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reading, going to

theatre

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and watching TV fluctuated over the period given. In 1980, there were only 20%

people

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who went on a hike.

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number had a 20% growth every decade and reached its peak in 2010 with 80% of the population.

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, internet surfing

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had an upward trend. It started with around 5% in 1980, and slightly increased to 15% in 2000.

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number

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increased by three-fold in 2010 to 50%.

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, watching TV began with the highest

persentage

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percentage

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the beginning of the period which was 60%. There was a slight increase until the 2000s when it dropped to approximately 65% of elderly

people

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, There were around 30%

elders

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of elders

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who loved reading in 1980.

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this

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number fluctuated during the next 20 years and

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with a notable increase accounting for 60% of

people

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in 2010.

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elderly

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the elderly

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who visited the theatre

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experienced a decline during 1990 and

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percentage rose gradually and allocated around three-quarters of

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in 2010.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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202 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Elderly population
Leisure activities
Trends
Popularity
Steady rise
Gradual increase
Growing interest
Decline
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Upward trend
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