The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The given line chart shows
the
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information about the production level of major
fuel
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fuels
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in the United Kingdom, broken down into three different types: petroleum, coal, and natural
gas
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, between 1981 and 2000.
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, it can be clearly observed that both
petroluem
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petroleum
and natural
gas
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experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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that
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of
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coal underwent a downward trend.
However
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, it is interesting to note that petroleum outnumbered the other two energy resources throughout the given time frame.
To begin
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with, in 1981, at about 85 energy
unit
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units
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, oil accounted for the largest
productions
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level among all others.
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the amount of coal produced in
UK
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was 80, that of natural
gas
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was roughly half of it at 40 in 1981. It is noticeable that
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petroluem
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petroleum
level reached
at
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140 during
1980s
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the 1980s
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before slowly
dropped
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to 100 in 1990. Coal,
on the other hand
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,
expereinced
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experienced
fluctuation during the first three years with dramatically fall to 40 and
bounced
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back to 60 till 1990. Natural
gas
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remained stable at the same figure before slightly
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in 1990. From 1991 onward, Petroleum rose to 140 again in 1996 before ending with
it
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peaks at above 140 before 2000.
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natural
gas
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increased at a constant rate to just over 100 in the end, coal
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a
reverese
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reverse
trend of falling at under 40 in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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