The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 200 and predicts population growth until 2050.
The line graph illustrates the information about India's and China's citizen growth since 2000 and the estimation of
thier
growth until 2050.
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their
Overall
, Indian
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the Indian
population
is predicted to increase continuously over the next 50 years, whereas
Chinese
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the Chinese
population
is forecasted to fall down
.
In 2000, the number of Indian Change preposition
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people
was 1,000 billion
which less
than the number of Chinese Add a missing verb
is less
people
approximately 250 billion
.
In the next two decades, the citizen
in both countries were Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
in
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on
trend
of high up. It can be clearly seen that the Add an article
the trend
a trend
population
in India rose sharply to 1,200 and 1,300 billion
in 2010 and 2020 in order. Meanwhile
the residents in China steadily climbed up to 1,350 and 1,400 Add a comma
Meanwhile,
billion
in the same period as well.
Incidentally, the Population
Division of the United Nations source shows the figures of India’s and China’s citizen
which might increase and overlap at the equilibrium point around 1,410 Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
billion
in 2030.
Although
the number of Chinese people
in 2040 may remain the same as in last
decade, Correct article usage
the last
but
it may Remove the conjunction
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has
a minor change which decline to 1,400 Wrong verb form
have
billion
in 2050.
In Contrast
, there may have
a major change in the quantities of Indian Verb problem
be
people
which high
up to 1,400 Rephrase
will reach
billion
in 2040 and reach a peak at 1,600 billion
by 2050.Submitted by dondollaraus on
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