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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village
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Chorleywood
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a village
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neighboring
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London, experienced
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 expansion from 1868 to 1994 because the population of citizens rose consistently in the start
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middle
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 of the nineteenth century.
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 as main road, motorway and railway. In 1868, Chorleywood was a small town and only had a main road until 1883. The village was constructed
then
 became bigger and extended to the south
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between 1883 and 1922. The railway was built in 1909 which located between two new townships from west and east. The Cities experienced
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construction around three
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 complex places in the southeast and two districts in the northeast where in the middle there was a roundabout. When the motorway was built in 1970, the five new places were started to
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 out by motorway and remained until 1994.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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