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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line charts illustrate information about the amount of carbon dioxide which a person emits into the environment in the
UK
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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, which was made by the
UK
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 citizen, was the biggest in the surveyed times.
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, CO2
emissions
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was
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 downward in the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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,
while
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 they were opposite in other countries. First and foremost, the average of CO2
emissions
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 per
UK
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 individual was the biggest at 11
tonnes
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 in 1967. In 40 years later, it decreased gradually to 9
tonnes
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 in 2007. Meanwhile, the proportion of CO2
emissions
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 in
Sweden
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 was less than
the
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in the
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UK
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 about 2
tonnes
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.
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, it reached a peak in 1977 at above 10
tonnes
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 before going down sharply
under
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 6
tonnes
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. On the other
hands
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, the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person was upward in Italy and Portugal. A person emits CO2 approximately 1.6
tonnes
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 in Portugal and 4.2
tonnes
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 in
Sweden
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. Both regions rose
considerablely
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considerably
about
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 4
tonnes
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 at the frame time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, sweden, emissions, co, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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