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The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.
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The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the considerable
modications
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modifications
medications
 that had been done in Stokeford
city
 over the period 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, there are several
change
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changes
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 that took place, the most noticeable are more number of
houses
 are constructed.
To begin
 with, in 1930 Stokeford
city
considers
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was considered
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 of huge farmland across the
city
.
Its
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It
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also
 include
Stoke
Correct article usage
the Stoke
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river
Capitalize word
River
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 which
flow
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flows
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 from north to south. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
city
 there was a large
house
 with a garden, adjacent to
large
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the large
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house
 there was a primary school in the north of
garden
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the garden
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.
Furthermore
city
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the city
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also
 includes
few
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a few
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number of
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apply
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houses
 with
Post
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a Post
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 office and shops near them. In 2010,
large
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the large
a large
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house
 was reconstructed into
Retirement
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a Retirement
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house
,
whereas
,
primary
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the primary
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 school was increased in size. Farmland
were
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was
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 converted into
colony
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colonies
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 with many
number of
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apply
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houses
. These new
houses
 were constructed
in
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on
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sides
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the sides
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 road coming from north to south of the
city
. The post office and bridge remain unchanged
throught
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throughout
through
 the period of 80 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, houses, house with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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  • transformation
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • development
  • expansion
  • urbanization
  • replacement
  • redevelopment
  • renovation
  • gentrification
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