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The chart below give information on Internet use at home in Australia between 2011 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate
internet
 usage at home in
australia
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 from 2010 to 2011. The first bar graph shows the three main purposes of
internet
useage
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use
, Social networking, purchasing bills or making
reservation
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reservations
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on
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online and Emailing.
Then
, Remaining Graphs represent The proportion of
Internet
 use by
age
 group.
Overall
,
It is clear that
 the majority reason
of
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internet
 consumption is Emailing
from
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the first chart.
Although
,
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The
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social networking
service
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services
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 accounted for the
least
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lowest
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 proportion
by
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 all combined
groups
,
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stood at the Highest at around 90
percent
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per cent
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 in
15
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the 15
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-24
age
 group. Looking at the charts more closely, The most common reason
of
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internet
 use was Emailing in all
groups
, reporting around 80
percent
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per cent
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 in all
age
groups
.
However
, The rate of
internet
 usage for purchasing and social network service
show
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are
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 roughly equal to each other from the Top graph at around 60
percents
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percent
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. Notably,
main
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the main
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age
groups
of
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using those
servieces
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services
 are different. Higher
propotion
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proportion
 for Social network
serviece
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service
services
using
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use
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 is taken by the younger
age
groups
 compared to teenagers use
internet
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the internet
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 to make purchasing accounted
at
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for
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 40
percent
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per cent
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 which was the least
propotion
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proportion
promotion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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