A map illustrating the evolution of the Lakeside area from 2000 to 2009

The map demonstrates the changes
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the Lakeside area in nine years. From an
overall
perspective, the
lake side
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witnessed total
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, as except for
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and
residental
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area, the constructions
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completely.
First,
a striking feature was the expansion of the industrial complex, as the woodland and the resident building were cleared in
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for the complex. In 2000, three
residental
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area
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appeared on the map,
while
around a decade later, two out of three were cleared and made room for grocery
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industry place. As for
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entertainment purposes, multi-screen cinema
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the place of
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centre for the
last
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, a second school was added for study reasons. ...................
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Your essay would benefit from a stronger introduction and conclusion. A clear introduction sets the stage for your reader, and a conclusion wraps up your discussion effectively.
logical structure
Ensure clarity by maintaining a consistent structure, such as listing changes in a logical sequence. Consider using transitions more frequently to guide the reader smoothly between ideas.
supported main points
You've made good use of specific details from the map to support your points. Mentioning specific changes adds depth to your response.
complete response
Your essay effectively identifies key changes in the Lakeside area over the nine-year period, demonstrating good task understanding.

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