One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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With the increasing populations worldwide, inevitably there
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necessities. A place to live or home is an essential need and
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governments are facing issues
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this
demands
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.
However
,
this
does come with consequences
in particular
to our
nature
. Not only
development
can cause pollution, it can
also
harm our flora and fauna.
Firstly
, any
development
, without a doubt will contribute to our global warming.
For instance
, the work to build a housing area can cause air, water and sound
pollutions
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. Operations of heavy machinery can cause air pollution
whereas
wastage from developing
this
area can lead to water pollution.
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, with an
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in
development
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pollutions
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rate indirectly will rise alarmingly.
Secondly
, house
development
projects can endanger our wild species.
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,
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including the white elephant has
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extinct
due to
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development
. To develop
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land, the area needs to be cleaned and
this
can harm our
nature
in the process.
Therefore
, it is
indeniably
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undeniably
undeniable
that developing housing areas could be a serious concern to our mother
nature
. In conclusion, housing projects are important to meet the demands of current populations.
However
,
this
comes with a great impact
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our
nature
and can contribute to climate changes due
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global warming. Meticulous
innitiatives
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initiatives
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should be taken by the government to minimize these negative impacts including proper town planning and management.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph consistently addresses a single main idea, with clear connections to the topic sentence and a logical progression of ideas.
task achievement
Provide a more thorough exploration of both the positive and negative aspects of housing development and its impact on the environment to enhance the depth of the analysis.
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Include more specific examples and data that are directly related to the topic to support your arguments and make them more compelling.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion topic.
task achievement
The essay touches on important environmental issues related to housing development, highlighting key points that are relevant to the task.

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