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The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.
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The map illustrates some changes that were made to the town of Kimsville facilities infrastructure between the year 2002 and today.
This
 is noticeable that five main modifications were made to the town of Kimsvillefacilities foundation. These involved the
buildings
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building
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 of new apartments,
new
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a new
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 train station,
software
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a software
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 company,
pub
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a pub
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 and
football
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a football
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 stadium. Looking at the changes in more detail, in 2002, there
were
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was
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 woodland in the
north-west
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northwest
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 and the
south-west
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southwest
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 of
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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. These were cut down, and replaced
to
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with
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 the new apartments in the north-west,
while
 the football stadium is
the
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in the
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 south-west. The
city
center
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centre
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 remained unchanged. The two maps
also
 show that changes were made to the factory.
In today
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Today
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, the factory
were
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was
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 demolished and
coverted
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covered
into
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by
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 the high-rise buildings software company.
Moreover
, the new train station
were
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 constructed on the west side of
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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.
However
,
in
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apply
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today,
this
 old cinema
had
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has
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 become a decorated pub. It is located in the south of the
city
center
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centre
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • commercial facilities
  • economic growth
  • population expansion
  • employment opportunities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • environmental conservation
  • industrial areas
  • urban development
  • transformation
  • relocation
  • quality of life
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