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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using clear linking words or phrases. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or evidence to support your points. This will make your argument more convincing and comprehensive.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines the main argument and the conclusion effectively summarizes your points.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the task and explores the issue of parental pressure on children, which indicates a good grasp of the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay presents a clear viewpoint on the negative effects of pressure on children, which demonstrates an effort to address the task requirements.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite