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write a letter telling your friend about your good news what is it what does it affect ur life invite at home

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Dear
RahuL
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Rahul
, Wanted to
shate
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share
one
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some
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 good news with you which
i
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I
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 recently got The
vale
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value
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we
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apply
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is that I got
promotion
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a promotion
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 in my work
now
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and now
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 i working as
Service
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a Service
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 Manager in my company . personal exa pear basic necessities.
Therefore
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, with
this
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 handsome
A
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An
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alary
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salary
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heldm
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held
no
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not
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afford
offord
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afford
 my expenses as
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planned
I planned
iplanned
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planned
 and
live
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lived
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 in
howi
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how
canA
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can
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luxusy
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luxury
 lifestyles)
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Furthermore
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, I invited you
at
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to
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 my home
in
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apply
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next week as
i
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I
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 am you , as we met With love Nardeep

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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more logically. Ensure that each paragraph has a single focus or idea, which will help in maintaining coherence.
task achievement
Make sure to fully develop each point you want to make, and include all parts of the task (e.g., how the good news affects your life, inviting your friend over).
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and consistent with informal letter writing, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You have included a greeting and a closing, which adds to the cohesion of the letter and shows good understanding of letter structure.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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