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Band 2.5

share good news with friend how it effects your life invite at home

#news #friend #effects #life #home
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Dear Rahul
i
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 hope your doing well ,
good
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in good
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 health and in high spirits. I want to share
one
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some
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 good news with you which
i
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 recently got at my
workpalce
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workplace
 that
i
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 got promoted to senior engineer from
junior
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a junior
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 engineer.
Besides
this
, my salary has increased twice from my
last
 salary. As you know
its
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 very tough to afford basic necessities these days
therefore
 with
this
 handsome salary now
i
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 can enjoy my life and
full fill
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fulfil
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 my dreams.
In Addition
 to
this
,
i
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 organised
party
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a party
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 at my home to celebrate my happiness with my
collegues
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colleagues
therefore
 invite you
for
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to
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 the same. looking forward to
see
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 you soon as we met
last
 time two years back. with love Navdeep
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introduction conclusion present
Consider a clearer separation between the introduction and body. This will enhance the logical flow and make each section stand out.
clear comprehensive ideas
Aim for complete sentences and check for typos, such as "workpalce" and "collegues". These small changes can improve overall readability and clarity.
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Successfully conveyed the main message of sharing the good news and inviting the friend, fulfilling the task requirements well.
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The essay has a positive tone and expresses excitement in a friendly manner, making it engaging to the reader.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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