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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815.
#two #maps #show #changes #place #town #westley
The two maps illustrate the changes
of
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an
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the
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 unidentified town of Westley between 1815 and now.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that that there were only basic and vital infrastructures in the past,
whereas
that
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of
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recent version
offer
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offers
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a
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diverse facilities and
transportations
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transportation
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.
However
, it is interesting to note that though there were some major and minor changes
but
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both the market square and town hall remained the same.
To begin
 with, in 1815, a closer look at the
map
 shows that residential
area
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areas
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mainly
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were mainly
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 situated in the
South east
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Southeast
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 of the
map
 where the Market
square
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Square
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 and
townhall
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town hall
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 located at the
center
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centre
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 surrounded
with
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 houses on the right and Fields on the left on the bottom of
illustration
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. Church and Coach Inn was situated not far from it. There are two possible
entry
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entries
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 to the town; one
in
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 the
north east
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northeast
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 of the
map
 from the Tinton village, the other on the west headed toward London where the Twine toll bridge
that
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apply
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cross
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 over the river Twine.
Moreover
, the
landlord
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landlord's
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 house was located
nearby
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near
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 the border of Tinton village and across the Lenton woods on the
right hand
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 side. Westley nowadays, there were major changes
on
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transportations
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transportation
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 options
along with
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replacing
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replaced
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 with residential areas and business estates. In terms of destruction, the Toll bridge and fields
was
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 replaced with the railway track and station. Lenton
woods
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Woods
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also
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was also
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 converted into
a housing estates
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a housing estate
housing estates
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.
While
 Market
square
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 and townhall remained the same,
others
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other
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 facilities
converted
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were converted
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 into others
such
 as
church
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the church
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become
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becoming
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 a WestGate shopping centre, the
coach
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Coach
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 Inn
become
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becoming
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sports
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a sports
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centers
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center
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 and
musuem
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museum
museums
,
the
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and the
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 lord house
become
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becoming
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 the lenton hotel. and
others
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other
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 facilities spurt
in
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at
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 the bottom of the
map
.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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