In recent years virtual tourism including virtual reality tours, 360 videos has emerged as an alternative form of travelling reshaping the way people explore destinations and connect with cultural heritage from afar. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
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Virtual tourism has expanded as a way of experiencing travelling from a distance.
This
essay will provide advantages
and disadvantages of virtual travel.
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the advantages
Firstly
, doing virtual tours saves a lot of time
, it can be done on your own time
, during weekends or breaks. As a
result
you do not have to take Add a comma
result,
time
off, added bonus it is usually much cheaper or even free to access virtual museums and other places. That leads to another benefit: it is more accessible to do a virtual tour both for people, who have less money and for disabled
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because it costs almost no money and can be reached through your phone in your home. Remove the comma
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Consequently
, it gives more opportunities to see the world, for people, who otherwise
would not be able to.
The main drawback of virtual tourism is the lack of real experience, when you travel in person you get to not only see and hear your location,
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also
feel it through touch, smell and taste. Even though you can see it, it will not feel as real as an in-person visit. Travelling is an experience in itself you get to meet new people, hear other languages and emerge
yourself in diverse cultures, Verb problem
immerse
while
doing it online you miss out on all of the immersion. Another added disadvantage is you are only able to see what is presented for
you online, you can choose from a variety of preselected locations. Change preposition
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As a
result
you do not have Add a comma
result,
freedom
of choosing and exploring little nooks and crannies of each travel destination.
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the freedom
To conclude
, travelling online saves time
, is cheaper and more accessible, but lacks the essence of real experience and takes away opportunities to connect with culture
and your freedom to choose your own exploration path. I believe virtual tourism has its place, but the disadvantages outweigh the advantages and travelling in person is a much more suitable choice.Add an article
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To strengthen your task response, try to elaborate on the points made with more specific examples or case studies. For instance, you could mention a specific virtual tour platform or a case where virtual tourism provided significant benefits or challenges to users.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay could benefit from clearer transitions between ideas. Using linking words like 'On the other hand', 'Furthermore', or 'In addition' could help guide the reader and improve cohesion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion by clearly outlining the objective of the essay.
task achievement
You presented a balanced view on the topic, discussing both advantages and disadvantages, which shows thorough consideration of the task.
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