The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map depicts the transformation of the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to the present time . After analysing the map, it can be seen clearly that in 1995, there was farmland and a forest park in the northeast
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while
it was converted into a sports site , especially for golf and tennis in the present era.it is noticeable that in the direction of northwest
housing
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housing,
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society was visible in 1995,
whereas
it is at a similar place today in the northwest.
Further
, the shows that the seaport was located at the bottom of the map in 1995, whilst it disappeared later.In the southwest shops and fish market was transformed into restaurants and apartments after 1995.
furthermore
in the southeast,
besides
hotels and cafes, a car park was built later in 1995.
Overall
.it is obvious that remarkable development has done during the periods some area was extended and some areas
was
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removed.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • village
  • Ryemouth
  • 1995
  • present
  • houses
  • small school
  • residential areas
  • amenities
  • population
  • increased
  • growth
  • expansion
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