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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
chart
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 illustrates the proportion of
the
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Australian
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 household
energy
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used from appliances and
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 gases.
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,
it is clear that
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Australian
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 households use most of their
energy
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 and
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gas
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emissions
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 for heating and water heating. Refrigeration is used the least in both charts. The proportion of heating accounts for the largest amount of
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 use by
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 households (42%)
while
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greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 account for only 15%. Water heating in both charts does not differ too much,
energy
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 use is 30% and
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 32%. Other devices ranked 3rd in
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 1 and 2nd highest in
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 2, just behind water heating in
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gas
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emissions
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. Regarding the remaining categories, cooling accounts for the lowest figures in both charts. Lighting accounts for 8% of
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gas
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emissions
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, twice the amount of
energy
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 used (4%). Refrigeration(14%) in
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 2, twice the
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 used by
Australian
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 apartments (7%)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, australian, energy, greenhouse, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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