The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The following chart illustrates the
number
of
people
who attended various activities at a social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020. At first glance, it is evident that the
number
of
people
who were a part of
film
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club was the highest over the years covered in the graph. Looking at the details, the
number
of film club and martial arts participants fluctuated with no significant change from 2000 to 2020. The
number
of individuals who attended film club was between 60 and 70, and the
number
of martial arts participants was between 30 to 40. In terms of amateur dramatics, under 30
people
were involved in amateur dramatics in 2000. But, the
number
of its participants rose slightly, followed by a gradual decline from 2005 to 2020, reaching under 10 by 2020. Looking at the line for the
number
of
people
who played table tennis, it started with 10
people
and increased slowly over a year. After remaining stable over the next year, it increased significantly to hit a peak of nearly 60. Regarding musical performances, the
number
of musical
performances'
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fans was none in 2005.
However
, it rose moderately to reach over 10 in 2010. It continued to grow slightly from 2010 to 2020.
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