The money spend by the governments on space programmes would be better pent on public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that governments spend
alot
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a lot
of amounts
money
on large projects like space programmes.
While
it is a commonly held belief that it
benfits
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benefits
the
saince
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science
to help us to discover our plants, there is
also
an argument that it is more
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useful
usefully
spend
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money
in
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humans
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needs like
school
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schools
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and hospitals.
This
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essay
easy
will
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analyse
this
topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the
hand
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other hand
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, the
spcae
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space
is like
mystery
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a mystery
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box and we need to search for
new
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thing
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in it. In
other
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word
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some people say
may
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maybe
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we can live in other
plants
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places
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if the earth had a
serius proplem
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serious problem
like a war so we want another place to live. In
additon
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addition
, may we
found
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another living creatures
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another living creature
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like and
may be
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maybe
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we
conect
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connect
with him and help each other.
For example
, NASA
going
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for
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to
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apply
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Mars and
discover
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it
for
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to
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find another living place and if
this
plant
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planet
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have
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some Living creatures in it .
On the other hand
,
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and
hopitals
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hospitals
, roads it is important for
human
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humans
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every where
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everywhere
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, and
spend
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spending
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money
to improve
it
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them
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is important. It
possible
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is possible
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to say that
spend
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spending
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resurce
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resources
in
hospital
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hospitals
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can help to save
people
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people's
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lives and
same
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the same
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thing with
school
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schools
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maybe we can have
alot
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a lot
of good
doctor
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doctors
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if we have good schools.
Morever
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Moreover
,
bulid
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build
a new roads
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new roads
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and
improve
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improving
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the
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apply
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transportion
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transportation
make
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makes
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the
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apply
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live
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easier. For
instnace
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instance
, if we
bulid
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build
a metro
sestym
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system
like in
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right now the trafc will be gone. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
this
topic. On balance,
however
,
i
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tend to believe that if we spend the
money
in wise, and make sure we have good schools and hospitals and roads we can spend the
money
in
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on
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other project
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another project
other projects
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like space or
anythin
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anything
big that help us in future .
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