The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes in young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes in young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The chart illustrates the information on the location of diverse types of
dance
classes
for young people in a town in Australia.
Overall
, there are significant differences in terms of ballet, tap, and modern. As shown, 48% of
students
preferred to practice a different type of
dance
classes
in a private studio, and
then
24% of
students
participated in
dance
classes
in school halls. Clearly, a significant decrease can show in college-based studios. In general, there a significant increase can be observed in the
age
group
under 11 years of participants in the ballet class
dance
to 600
students
.
In contrast
, the
age
between 11 to 16 was less than the previous
age
group
, it has 300
students
. As can be seen, the
age
group
has been closed together in tap
dance
classes
which shows between 400 to 430
students
in both groups ages.
Moreover
, there is a dramatic rise in
age
under 11 on the number of
students
in modern, it has become 500
students
compared to another
age
groupage
group
, which was 300
students
. From an
overall
perspective, there are obvious that there several differences in
students
Change noun form
students'
student's
show examples
ages and the type of
dance
class that they joined in Australia
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, students, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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