The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.

The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.
The pie chart
illustarte
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illustrates
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the proportion of the
factors
of
death
of
indians
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Indian
people aged between 18 and 22 years old with about 19.548 total
number of
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population. 
Overall
, the biggest
factors
of
death
as the chart
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shown
shows
are accidents, homicide, and other
factors
with 44.19%, 13.91%, and 26.40%
respectivily
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respectively
. Whilst
the
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cancer, heart
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diseases
desires
, and suicide
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considere
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considered
consider
the
minimual cuase
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minimal causes
of
death
.
According to
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, the major factor of
the
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death
in India is accidents with almost the half of chart followed by other
factors
with almost
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quarter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • mortality rates
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • neoplasms (cancers)
  • chronic diseases
  • infectious diseases
  • statistical significance
  • preventable causes
  • health disparities
  • lifestyle factors
  • epidemiological data
  • public health
  • socioeconomic factors
  • medical conditions
  • healthcare access
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