The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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statistic

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statistics

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about ownership of electrical subjects and

sum

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housework's

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housework

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hours

doing

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in families in one state from 1920 to 2019.

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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have become common things in households.

While

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time

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of housework has reduced. On the one hand, in 1920, most of the regular devices were not so typical tools

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and only

one third

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of citizens had a washing machine or vacuum

clener

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cleaner

however

, in

comparison

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it was several times more than

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the refrigerator's

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refrigerator's

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percentage which

totaled

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, after a century,

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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significantly uplifted from 5 to 100, as a vacuum cleaner

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evolved into

common

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the common

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appliance,

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, washing machine's indicators increased but it

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affordable for everyone , and amounted

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to 65

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, hours of work reached 50 in 1920,

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index

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abruptly decreased to 20 in the next 40 years.

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, it continued the

tendancy

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tendency

tenancy

and dived to 10 in 2019 . Notably, it was five times less than the origin index.

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Topic Vocabulary:

household appliances
time-efficient
labour-saving devices
technological innovations
ownership rate
housework chores
domestic workload
automation
advancements
trend analysis
societal shifts
economic impact
durability
lifespan of appliances
maintenance
historical comparison
time allocation
drudgery reduction
energy consumption
disruption in trends

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