The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare data about the percentage of
ocean
pollutants between 1997 and 2007 from different sources such
as Air , farm waste
, industrial waste
, domestic sewage , offshore oil and marine.
Overall
, it is important that air pollution is the major factor for our ocean
so far while
reduced by %1 in 2007 only ; second , sewage rose modestly more than %40 in 10 years which gives us a red alert for our water quality in the near future; another notable point that litter was 0 impact for the ocean
in 2007 when it was %4 in 1997; moreover
, Offshore oil were increased by almost 3x and reach to the peak by %14; on the other hand
, the industrial waste
has been decreased more than twice within 10 years and get the lowest percentage at 9 ; similarly
, marine also
was less effect in 2007 compare to 1970 by %5.
In conclusion, by summing
up these points air pollution and sewage were the main reasons for Replace the word
sum
ocean
pollutants and our earth while
farm waste
, litter , and marine had less impact in 2007 which is great news for our ocean
.Submitted by no123fm on
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