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The line graph illustrates the number of international students (in thousands) enrolled in higher education in Australia, the UK, and Canada between 2010 and 2020. The pie chart shows the percentage distribution of these international students by region of origin in 2020.

The line graph illustrates the number of international students (in thousands) enrolled in higher education in Australia, the UK, and Canada between 2010 and 2020. The pie chart shows the percentage distribution of these international students by region of origin in 2020.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of undergraduate
students
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 enrolling in a university from 2010 to 2020
Overall
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, the graph shows a steady increase in the
number
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 of
students
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, starting at 10.000 in 2010 and reaching 20.000 by 2020.
In addition
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 to these key points, the
number
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 of
students
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 in 2015 was 15.000 The highest enrollment occurred in 2020, with 20.000
students
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,
while
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 2010 had the lowest, with 10.000
students
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 In 2015, the
number
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 of
students
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 reached 15.000, representing the midpoint between the lowest and the highest enrollment figure
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apply
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throughout the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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