The scheme below represents the process of brick manufacturing for the building industry.

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The scheme below represents the process of
brick
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the brick
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manufacturing industry. At
first,
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the clay is
digged
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dug
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up with a digger. After that, it is carried to
metal
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a metal
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grid to sift on the roller and to
sifted
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sift
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clay we add sand and water. From
this
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, with
help
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the help
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of wire cutters or
moulds
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moulds,
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we got
bricks
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.
Subsequently
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, half-done
bricks
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carried
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to
drying
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the drying
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oven for 24-48 hours.
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, dried
bricks
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putted
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put
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into
kiln
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the kiln
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. At
first,
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kiln
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the kiln
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is on moderate temperature between 200
°C
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- 980
°C
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,
then
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we increase the temperature to high 870
°C
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- 1300
°C
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. After that,
bricks
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cooled
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with a cooling chamber for 48 - 72 hours.
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, ready
bricks
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packed
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and sent to delivery. The
bricks
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are
strong-maded
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strong-made
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and sustainable because of drying, heating and cooling processes. Now, we can use
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this
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these
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bricks
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to build different buildings.
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Grammar
Try refining your sentence structures for better grammatical accuracy. For instance, 'digged up' should be 'dug up,' and 'putted' should be 'put.'
Introduction
Consider making the introduction clearer by directly stating the main stages. For example, 'The process of brick manufacturing involves several key stages, including...'
Conclusion
Conclude with a summary that encapsulates the entire process described.
Comprehensiveness
Your essay clearly describes the brick manufacturing process step by step, which is crucial for task achievement.
Logical Flow
You've done well in logically ordering the steps of the process. This helps the reader follow along easily.
Specificity
The inclusion of temperature ranges during the heating process shows good attention to detail.

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