Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Reading has always been considered
as
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a mainstream learning and entertainment medium.
However
,
due to
advancement
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advancements
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in technology and rapidly evolving content, videos
has
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become the most lucrative
form
of entertainment. I think
extended
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the extended
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use of graphics and dynamic sounds has made
movies
the most desired
form
of enjoyment. To commence,
rapid
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the rapid
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evolution of media
form
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has convinced people's perception to incline more towards information or entertainment broadcasted through
youtube
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YouTube
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,
instagram
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and many other media platforms. Often
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great quality
books
with
less
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sales
,
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hit
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the top
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charts of
Netflix
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Netflix's
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top 10
movies
list because
generally
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movie directors fill those book stories with dynamic sounds and great graphics
due to
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which people connect more with the stories and choose to stick with the
movies
.
For example
, J.K.
Rowling
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Rowling's
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books
became best selling after the release of the Harry Potter
movies
, because
audience
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the audience
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felt more connection with the characters.
However
, despite the trend of content being consumed more in the
form
of videos, the original quality information is still mostly sourced from
books
. It is scientifically proven that it may be hard to start reading a book, because of its boring interactive nature, but it gives immense satisfaction once
reader
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the reader
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starts connecting with the plot. It helps
brain
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the brain
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to increase imaginative powers and boost intellect significantly.
For instance
,
according to
a
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latest research, people who read short stories and
fictions
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fiction
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have less
chances
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of getting
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issues
in
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later
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a later
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age.
To conclude
,
i
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think rapidly evolving
vedio
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video
content is more interactive and interesting as compared to reading
books
because of
diverse
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the diverse
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visual and audio
experience
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experiences
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offered by the makers.
On the other hand
,
due to
limited
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the limited
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interaction options offered by the text, it is a less desired choice.
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task achievement
Provide a more balanced view. Although your main point is to argue in favor of movies, include more about fiction reading's benefits to strengthen your position. This would also show a comprehensive understanding of both sides.
language accuracy
Ensure correct use of articles and verb forms for more precision in your writing. Also, be cautious with your choice of vocabulary, like 'vedio' which should be 'video'.
coherence and cohesion
It might be helpful to outline your ideas briefly before writing to ensure logical progression and connection between your points. This can improve overall coherence and cohesion.
introduction
Your introduction is clear and sets up for the discussion well, clearly outlining your stance.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the Harry Potter series, which help in supporting your points effectively.
conclusion
Your conclusion nicely wraps up the essay by restating the main points and reinforcing your opinion.

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